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2. ''In the new scenes Pocket Monster XY scenes, Froakie, Ash has Pikachu use Quick Attack against an unknown opponent.'' | 2. ''In the new scenes Pocket Monster XY scenes, Froakie, Ash has Pikachu use Quick Attack against an unknown opponent.'' | ||
I think one usage of the word "scenes" is unnecessary here; either "In the new scenes of Pocket Monsters XY" or "In the new Pocket Monsters XY scenes" would seem like better phrasings, in my opinion. Also, regardless of which phrasing is used, I think the term "Pocket Monster XY" in this sentence needs the letter '''S''' appended to the word "Monster", since the XY anime series is being referred to as a whole, rather than a specific 'Pocket Monster/ | I think one usage of the word "scenes" is unnecessary here; either "In the new scenes of Pocket Monsters XY" or "In the new Pocket Monsters XY scenes" would seem like better phrasings, in my opinion. Also, regardless of which phrasing is used, I think the term "Pocket Monster XY" in this sentence needs the letter "'''S'''" appended to the word "Monster", since the XY anime series is being referred to as a whole, rather than a specific 'Pocket Monster/Pokémon' itself. | ||
Additionally, the word 'Froakie' looks oddly placed in the sentence. I'm assuming that the sentence is meant to indicate that Froakie is/was present in the anime preview as well (in addition to Ash, Ash's Pikachu, etc.), so I'd suggest the rephrasing of "In the new scenes of Pocket Monster'''s''' XY, Froakie '''appears''', and Ash has Pikachu use Quick Attack against an unknown opponent. | Additionally, the word 'Froakie' looks oddly placed in the sentence. I'm assuming that the sentence is meant to indicate that Froakie is/was present in the anime preview as well (in addition to Ash, Ash's Pikachu, etc.), so I'd suggest the rephrasing of "In the new scenes of Pocket Monster'''s''' XY, Froakie '''appears''', and Ash has Pikachu use Quick Attack against an unknown opponent. | ||
To whichever editor(s) alter(s) the page, thanks for taking this input into consideration. [[User:Fenyx4|Fenyx4]] ([[User talk:Fenyx4|talk]]) 20:59, 22 August 2013 (UTC) | To whichever editor(s) alter(s) the page, thanks for taking this input into consideration. [[User:Fenyx4|Fenyx4]] ([[User talk:Fenyx4|talk]]) 20:59, 22 August 2013 (UTC) | ||